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Some say theirs' is a tangled web,
(Surely full of spiders and their thread)
Other say theirs' is a wonderland,
(Did Alice fall down the hole again?)
But mine is a maze.
Some say theirs' is a castle,
(Cleaning THAT out must be quite a hassle)
Others say theirs' is a vast machine,
(I don't intend these to be mean.)
But mine is a maze.
A maze you say?
A labyrinth of books and art
In piles and on shelves.
There's even a machine
that sorts and delves
through all the rubble of
Myself.
My mind isn't neat and tidy,
It's a whirring buzzing mill.
"Would you all please just stand still!"
Can't you understand?
My mind isn't your Wonderland!
"I need some space."
Let's go back a pace.
My subconscious mind does not unwind through time
Spent at parties, movies, or shopping at the mall.
These things REALLY don't help at all.
All I need at the end of the day
Is time alone, at home.
Then maybe,
Just maybe,
I can find my way around one day.
(Surely full of spiders and their thread)
Other say theirs' is a wonderland,
(Did Alice fall down the hole again?)
But mine is a maze.
Some say theirs' is a castle,
(Cleaning THAT out must be quite a hassle)
Others say theirs' is a vast machine,
(I don't intend these to be mean.)
But mine is a maze.
A maze you say?
A labyrinth of books and art
In piles and on shelves.
There's even a machine
that sorts and delves
through all the rubble of
Myself.
My mind isn't neat and tidy,
It's a whirring buzzing mill.
"Would you all please just stand still!"
Can't you understand?
My mind isn't your Wonderland!
"I need some space."
Let's go back a pace.
My subconscious mind does not unwind through time
Spent at parties, movies, or shopping at the mall.
These things REALLY don't help at all.
All I need at the end of the day
Is time alone, at home.
Then maybe,
Just maybe,
I can find my way around one day.
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Hmm, how to say this? It's basically pent up frustration at not being understood over the past year at a new job.
I had a friend read this before I posted... He informed me he felt "bludgeoned." The purpose of that in this poem was to simulate how I feel when I'm yanked from one task to another after I've mentally engaged it.(i.e."This is your job for today." -25 minutes later- "Now your doing this instead today.")
I think my poetry is alike roller-coaster of meeter( whee! ). He was unavailable for comment.( I'll ask him when he is
)
Also, apparently being introverted is an "in" thing? Go figure.(You-Tube told me lies!)
I had a friend read this before I posted... He informed me he felt "bludgeoned." The purpose of that in this poem was to simulate how I feel when I'm yanked from one task to another after I've mentally engaged it.(i.e."This is your job for today." -25 minutes later- "Now your doing this instead today.")
I think my poetry is alike roller-coaster of meeter( whee! ). He was unavailable for comment.( I'll ask him when he is
)Also, apparently being introverted is an "in" thing? Go figure.(You-Tube told me lies!)
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To you read one of your pieces time I have finally found,
And I can say it is good, you weren't kidding around!
Yet one little remark I must make,
Which as constructive criticism, I hope you will take,
More fluid your verses should be,
If there is something you want to draw the attention on,
Use the break of the rhyme as something for the reader to stumble upon,
Cut the flow in half, and what you said will strike him!
Did this make my thought a bit less dim?
This said, is only a minor concern,
To read and comment on more I do yearn,
But I'll have to wait until my schedule is a bit less brim.
And I can say it is good, you weren't kidding around!
Yet one little remark I must make,
Which as constructive criticism, I hope you will take,
More fluid your verses should be,
If there is something you want to draw the attention on,
Use the break of the rhyme as something for the reader to stumble upon,
Cut the flow in half, and what you said will strike him!
Did this make my thought a bit less dim?
This said, is only a minor concern,
To read and comment on more I do yearn,
But I'll have to wait until my schedule is a bit less brim.